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as I sit in class
computer drawn images
noise called music

not a moving soul
only mere mortals
staring blankly

some one please, tell me what you think this means :smile:
I'd like to get interpitations :smile:
how is everyone :smile:
Logan

"On one whole bottle uplifting, theres no telling what I'll do.,Run head first into traffic, a mind set on annihlation. No sence makes sence" Pantera


Wed Aug 21, 2002 7:24 am
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I think you're missing a syllable in the last line on the first one. *grin*

I love haiku. Problem is that it's so Westernized.

I hate class, too. Where do you go?


Wed Aug 21, 2002 8:36 am
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i wanst shooting for accuracy, but yeah, there is one missing in the first line :|

I got to brown Collage-hoping to do 3d animation starting next quarter :smile:

I go part-full time from 7:30 to noon mon-fri, the full time cause there are no summer vacations, but a total of about 14 weeks off in the corse of the year-at the end of each quarter its either a week off, two weeks off, or for "xmas" vacation, its a month. :razz:


Wed Aug 21, 2002 10:03 am
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lines badly lacking
the necessary structure
are unhaikulike


Wed Aug 21, 2002 2:29 pm
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wait... doesn't moving have two syllables???

*winces, expecting a thwack on the head*

Crimson


Wed Aug 21, 2002 4:49 pm
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:wink:


Wed Aug 21, 2002 5:56 pm
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Ben, you *know* what your haiku does to me. Careful there. . . . *heh*


Wed Aug 21, 2002 9:04 pm
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heres another one for you, its not hiku :razz:

Red rose on the street
Crushed by my feet
A lack of water
Now the flower is beat

I will wait until later
Her words fallen in a crater
Will she send me news
or will the friendship falter

Today I saw some shoes
I have no money, no clues
Seemingly worthless, gives me the blues
We all pay our dues

Tonight is Long
Shall I write a song?

*takes a bow*thank you.

Logan

"Do you love your guns(yeah)
god(yeah)
the goverment(FUCK YEAH)"


Fri Aug 23, 2002 11:46 pm
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This is dark poety at its best! I would like to read more of Logan's work. Emo's beat dram!

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